This is second paragraph from my paper:
Although Wal-Mart is one of the largest companies, the condition of workers working over there is very worse. In the topic “up Against Wal-Mart” writer tries to show the condition of workers at Wal-Mart. The workers have to work on low wages and they are unpaid overtime.They have to work through out the stores as a cashier and door guard, in customer service and layaway, and at times even helping the stockmen and sales floor associates.
Hi Mahendra - Good start - think about how to give more specific information so that your ideas make more sense. For example:
ReplyDelete- Wal-Mart is one of the largest companies - where?
- Conditions there are worse compared to what?
- who is the writer of "Up Against Wal-Mart"?
- What kind of text is "Up Against Wal-Mart"? Can you find a clearer word to introduce it than 'topic'?
Look at the chapters of They Say, I Say mentioned in class to help with this.